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drunkenBlood
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This story shows potential I like it quite a bite the action scenes are nice and the speech feels fine overall this story could become great in the long run. Kempe going author👍🏿👍🏿

Non est Deus( Danmachi fanfic)

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EphemeralKaos
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You know I don't think you and I read the same thing because what I read had grammar so bad that most machine translations would be at least 5x easier to read and understand that this. But what has me like 100% certain we did not read the same thing was at the most confusing nonsensical and often times grammatically incorrect scenes in this thing where the fighting scenes the thing that you seem to love me no sense, I mean half the time this guy tells us what happens instead of showing us, which is like the number one rule of writing that you don't break and the other half of the time he's just explaining how he does this motion with one hand, and then this motion with another hand, and then the very next sentence is that the enemy is dead, even though you could never tell what enemy just died because the grammar is so awful that they never actually mention who is attacking who and if you think that was kind of confusing try to actually read one of the fight scenes in this thing because I am honestly convinced that you didn't read this at all