The story's pretty good. (If you can follow it) The grammar is.... well, I've certainly read worse The real kicker however is that this story reads like it was written by an Alzheimer's victim. The author can't keep straight who he's talking about. One minute it's the Maelstrom gang, next they're the Valentinos, then they suddenly become the Voodoo Boy's.
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