Review Detail of Arkella in Lightning Dragon

I’ve read through 35 chapters as of currently, and I find it to be mediocre at best. The whole premise was great, and I especially liked the character’s backstory. However, the problem is the entirety of the plot is strange, and abnormal. First of all, the dynamic between Lily and the main character doesn’t make much sense. His “flirting” was just him praying on her backstory. It didn’t make sense, and realistically, is not how you acquire any type of relationship– friendship or not. It’s even more unnatural how close they get– within a span of 2 chapters. Moving on to the writing quality, to say the least, it’s lackluster. The dialogue between characters is no better. The whole problem is that the characters are just not realistic, they’re uncanny. Yes, mc’s relationship with mom does have a reasonable depth to them, but the way he perceives, addresses, and dotes on others, is uncanny. They’re plenty of novels with wonderful diction and style, and this is certainly not one of them. I’m not expecting collegial level writing, but a version of writing that incorporates clean grammar that doesn’t force readers to reread a sentence because of how strangely it was formatted. Regarding just about stability of updates, and world background, I don’t have much to say.