Review Detail of SeraphWedd in This is no longer a book anymore

The story's premise is good, but I think the author needs to fix some parts. First, grammar. I suggest using a basic grammar checker like Grammarly or quillbot to fix minor grammar and punctuation mistakes.Second, Long Sentences. I know there are times where using long sentences seem appropriate, but it's actually pretty hard to read. Furthermore, it makes the work seem clunky.Third, the plot progression seem a little forced at the beginning and some parts every now and then. Try thinking about what's there, what the MC knows, and how she interacts with the world.That's it for now, I hope you continue improving this work. 😁More chapters~!