Hello, Author. From what I've read in chapters 1 through 3, there appear to be some errors, such as incorrect use of punctuation, and starting in chapter 4, you only focus on the character's dialogue. In order to increase the readers' interest in your story, add more description of the setting as well as details about the characters' actions and thoughts. That's all, continue the wonderful job.
xish101
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LIKExish101:Thanks for the review, It helps a lot, Thanks for taking your time to read my book.Have a good one.