Review Detail of Bad_Thiliono in Extra Pages: The Author's Odyssey

TLDR~ read it if it’s ever free and/or you’re the type of psychopath that doesn’t mind MTL (the story isn’t MTL its just jacked up) It’s like someone MTL’d the story and then the MTL missed some words so someone edited the word in phonetically even though it’s spelled correctly a few sentences later and at the same time the person who edited has English as a second or fifteenth language and when adjusting phrases and metaphors it’s as if they heard it once and tried to repeat it but jumbled it up and there is random and jarring breaks in the flow of proper grammar and diction so it’s not as bad as most MTL but you have to “autocorrect” a lot as you read and it feels like in some interactions whole sentences are just missing or there’s not enough info for the reader to understand why people react or say the way and things they do or maybe it made sense in the authors head and they didn’t review what they wrote properly idk and for the love of god please author find a better way to do exposition it’s like an elementary schooler was just introduced to the concept to put it as politely as possible it does not suspend my disbelief in the least the story and world have potential and my review is harsh but only because you have to pay to read this…… like the grammar in this review is dogshit its just one big run-on sentence but hey its free so idk maybe as your trying to figure out how to fucking write you shouldn’t be charging people for the luxury of consuming your hot garbage that being said I did purchase all the chapters up to 200 to give it a fair shake and to be fair it was amusing to a degree 1.2/10 would not recommend highly (unless free read)[img=recommend]