Review Detail of rcard2go in The Lore of Hegira

This story is amazing! I love the sci-fi space ship setting - it kind of reminds me of The Long Way to a Small Angry Planet by Becky Chambers. Similarly, the characters are super unique and full of life, which is honestly an amazing feat. As someone who writes a fast-paced novel, I have to admit this one is going a little too fast. I like the fast pacing, but once the story plot gets a little compromised it becomes an issue. Secondly, there are a lot of weird sentences, some which are not even sentences at all. While non-sentence sentences are usually not an issue in many books because they’re showing emphasis and personality, I just feel like the ones in this book are in weird places, detracting from precious details. Similarly, there really isn’t a lot of sentence variety, with lots of sentences being short but sweet. This contributes greatly to the rushed feeling your novel gives off. Also, I would love just a bit more showing and less telling, because I feel like I am told everything that Bex is thinking very directly. Lastly, I just want to congratulate you on the amazing character design, which is definitely some of the best I have seen!