Review Detail of Sinbau in My Hotel Manager System In The Apocalypse

Story has potential, Some things I liked were; - Pacing - Unique story idea at least in my case this the first time I come across smth like this - Character names it didn’t feel flat but still felt special - Tone when narrating Plus not too many grammar mistakes. Suggestions I have for u author is; - Shorten synopsis - Writing was blunt I think being more descriptive, elongating and symbolism will help with that and w smth I like to call dramatizing it - I also feel like there are some scenes that can be cut short and the ones that need to be long will take up that space. For example critical moments/analyzing and things like that Well done author, keep writing [img=update]!