Overall, a very honest attempt. Very interesting world background, you can surely build up upon that. I would like to say that, it could be way better if you paced the story in such a way that we, as readers could glimpse the world and the characters intention on our own. The various informations in the beginning could be edited, grammar needs some work. Overall, interesting concept.
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