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i mean what is this it's not readable at all and I read mtl all the time but its harder than those its so f ed up so many plot holes and unnecessary changes and if you want to show politics as all other who make mc a villain please know how to write that stuff the way you wrote it is like a kids play imitating politics I mean at least see if your story structure is coming together it could have been so easily be countered if you used some more open approach for many things like the system can do so much but you make it so mc didn't use it to its potential.

System in the Multiverse [R18]

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coo