Review Detail of Reality_warper004 in Hitman x Family
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Its like the story is getting worse by the chapter. I am truly sorry and this is my first time writing a 1 star review but its really bad. For the first 20 chapters it was really wholesome but then author started to add way too many women that are all head over heels for him but the thing is this isn't a harem! The mc has a loving wife and kids!! So the whole thing is so forced that sometimes i read a chapter or like 3-4 chapters and not understand a single thing that happened except that at least 3 new girls were introduced and immediately fell in love with the mc. I really liked this Fic at the start but the author seems way to fixated on non main female characters that he has almost given up on the story as a whole.
Hitman x Family
Livice
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Feel forced, you say? With all the background and reasons why they all like him, not to mention the backstory? It just means he's succeeded in infiltrating that school, considering the MISSION he's currently on. You gotta be kidding me if you still consider it as a force that came out of nowhere. You just hate that this is not a harem story, and that's it goodbye.
honestly harem elements can be annoying but that’s the only problem I got with it still look forward to every new chapter and wish there was more
Livice:Feel forced, you say? With all the background and reasons why they all like him, not to mention the backstory? It just means he's succeeded in infiltrating that school, considering the MISSION he's currently on. You gotta be kidding me if you still consider it as a force that came out of nowhere. You just hate that this is not a harem story, and that's it goodbye.
Nah man, i honestly don't want it to be a harem. I loved the wholesome family chapter you did. I just hate the fact that you keep adding random plot points while leaving the previous ones open. And their are too many random girls falling for a married man in a single chapter. Do you want an example? Tell what was the point of Momo or the vice President girl straight up falling in love with the MC in a single chapter. Hey man i get that its hard to write a chapter every day, specially when someone is telling you that i didn't like it. But if you can't even handle constructive criticism then how are you going to grow as a writer? I like your story and am gonna still read it as i have judged it and i'm gonna really hope that it gets better.
Livice:Feel forced, you say? With all the background and reasons why they all like him, not to mention the backstory? It just means he's succeeded in infiltrating that school, considering the MISSION he's currently on. You gotta be kidding me if you still consider it as a force that came out of nowhere. You just hate that this is not a harem story, and that's it goodbye.
Livice:Too many women when MC becomes a teacher in high school? That makes sense... And as for that Momo girl? Hmm, maybe I should relearn the difference between falling in love and admiration. For the record, I'm cool with this 'constructive' review. Yeah, thank you don't worry. Stand proud with it, pal.
Livice:Feel forced, you say? With all the background and reasons why they all like him, not to mention the backstory? It just means he's succeeded in infiltrating that school, considering the MISSION he's currently on. You gotta be kidding me if you still consider it as a force that came out of nowhere. You just hate that this is not a harem story, and that's it goodbye.
nuh uh.its hitting two weeks. get back in the wage cage and waste your life away writing fanfiction for us.
Livice:I dunno since I lost the mood lol
