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Okay so, I’ve read at least a few chapters of your book and I’ve got to say that I was a bit confused about the first part (the prologue). What exactly was going on in the World? But then, I realized it was just a dream. What I like about this book is that it can be adapted into an anime series, probably with sci-fi elements. The downside is that you’re dumping too much information on the reader terms that they’ll hardly remember. My suggestion is: - Incorporate your info-dumping in a chapter where people are having a conversation about the history of your World. Info dumping kills the mood. I know it’s a hard habit to unlearn, but I prefer seeing their abilities in action rather than having you explain it. Anyhow, I like this story, it’s basically three friends with cute elf ears having a bunch of shenanigans. Not really my type of novel, but as an anime fan I appreciate your use of -sama and -chan. I know you have other books that contain similar lore, and I’d be more than willing to help you on that if you want. Just tag me. Best of luck on your writing journey.