Review Detail of NC1 in Evolving Silver Dragon

Has potential if you stop using anime quotes You got to remember all of the anime quotes are from real life they have just been modified to fit that certain line Or there's a couple that's inspired by real-life at the end of the day stop using anime quotes Also please add more depth to the fight scenes its like I'm not even reading ait he fighting it just he's there then isn't That's were depth and understanding of your MC come from There's aexample of depth don't take the names serious since I changed it just for this example In the heart of the frozen wasteland, the Ice Conjurer and the Ember Wielder engaged in an elemental duel, the very air pulsating with the energy of their clashing powers. The Ember Wielder, flames dancing around him like a tempest, hurled searing fireballs with deadly accuracy. In response, the Ice Conjurer weaved a dance of frost, conjuring icicles that cut through the air like shards of crystal. Each move echoed with the clash of opposing forces, a spectacular display of supernatural warfare. Confident in the roaring inferno he commanded, the Ember Wielder unleashed a torrent of flames, but the nimble Ice Conjurer eluded the onslaught. "BANG!" A fireball collided with an icy barricade, the clash creating an ephemeral veil of steam and mist. Seizing the moment, the Ember Wielder surged forward with a blazing punch. Yet, the Ice Conjurer, a master of agility, countered swiftly, ensnaring his foe in a rapidly forming cocoon of freezing tendrils. The frozen prison proved unyielding as the Ember Wielder struggled within. Preparing for a climactic finish, the Ice Conjurer summoned a grandiose frigid tornado, engulfing his adversary in a swirling vortex of frost. "BANG!" The icy tornado dissipated, revealing the defeated Ember Wielder encased in a glistening layer of ice. The cold had triumphed over the flames, leaving a haunting silence in the aftermath of their elemental clash. In this wintry battlefield, the Ice Conjurer emerged as the victor, his mastery over frost standing as an indomitable force against the Ember Wielder's fiery onslaught. The desolate landscape bore witness to the dramatic conclusion of this supernatural showdown. See the depth that's in the example You don't have to copy it's just the thing I noticed was I barley knew what was happening in the fights 3.4 usually give a 3 for effort but this got potential so it's a 3.4 for me