Review Detail of Number1_sama in IN Harry Potter With a System
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The main character behaves like a dumb child despite living 999 lives before this. I just can't. I'm completly unable to read this without dying of cringe. The dialouges in this fanfiction are complete garbarge and feel/ sound unnatural. I found myself skipping dialouges, entire paragraphs and later on even entire chapters. Decided to drop. Overall a badly written, wish fullfillment power trip fiction. If you truly want to read some good ones try the ones listed below. This fanfiction is mere trash (but still better than anything I could come up with lol) compared to those:- Harry Potter and the ringmaker (Webnovel)- Harry Potter and the rise of the protector (webnovel)- HP a magical journey (completed) (webnovel)-Voleur D'âme (fanfiction)-Odyssey of a mage part I, part II and part III (fanfiction)-Heart and Soul (fanfiction)-Harry Potter and the rune stone path (fanfiction)-Phoenix from the ashes (fanfiction)
IN Harry Potter With a System
Dreamer_1297
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I read your review, before answering to you I wanted to know more about what sets those works apart from mine.I had already read a few books.. Let me start with a magical journey - The mc, Quin West, knew that Pettigrew was dangerous ,Voldemort was dangerous BUT he still decided to come to limelight UNNECESSARILY by organising tri-wizard tournament. He lost one of his eyes because of that. Later on, he knew that he was no match for either Dumbledore or Voldemort, but he still put his nose in their fight and the consequences were that let alone Voldy, even Dumbledore attacked him.. Next- he was blackmailed by Dumbledore because of his stupidity and overconfidence which resulted in him being running away from his loving grandfather. I also started reading another work you mentioned , Odyssey of a mage- MC was cautious of Dumbledore, but when Dumbledore called him for a meeting, he decided to test Dumbledore by stating his ideals. What if Dumbledore had been truly bad? What were his contingencies? Then he even immediately told his about Riddle, who had not even started Hogwarts by that time. as if it would not expose his future knowledge.. Did MC who was merely 11 years old, without any overwhelming advantages, truly believed himself to be capable of understanding Dumbledore with just one meeting ? ? I'm sorry. I can't write that kind of plot. as for my writing quality - I had spoken about it in one of the announcements- that English is not my primary language. I'm a very new writer and It'll obviously show in my work.
Yeah bro the mc of odyssey decided to spare riddle cause she was a girl. And apparently was planning to kill, if it was tom. Then their weird toxic relationship. Worst of all he ignored politics for so long then suffered because of it even tho he knew advantage of politics in his past life. Have you read the artificier legacy? Even that had some cool ideas.
Dreamer_1297:I read your review, before answering to you I wanted to know more about what sets those works apart from mine.I had already read a few books.. Let me start with a magical journey - The mc, Quin West, knew that Pettigrew was dangerous ,Voldemort was dangerous BUT he still decided to come to limelight UNNECESSARILY by organising tri-wizard tournament. He lost one of his eyes because of that. Later on, he knew that he was no match for either Dumbledore or Voldemort, but he still put his nose in their fight and the consequences were that let alone Voldy, even Dumbledore attacked him.. Next- he was blackmailed by Dumbledore because of his stupidity and overconfidence which resulted in him being running away from his loving grandfather. I also started reading another work you mentioned , Odyssey of a mage- MC was cautious of Dumbledore, but when Dumbledore called him for a meeting, he decided to test Dumbledore by stating his ideals. What if Dumbledore had been truly bad? What were his contingencies? Then he even immediately told his about Riddle, who had not even started Hogwarts by that time. as if it would not expose his future knowledge.. Did MC who was merely 11 years old, without any overwhelming advantages, truly believed himself to be capable of understanding Dumbledore with just one meeting ? ? I'm sorry. I can't write that kind of plot. as for my writing quality - I had spoken about it in one of the announcements- that English is not my primary language. I'm a very new writer and It'll obviously show in my work.
ALEX1402:Yeah bro the mc of odyssey decided to spare riddle cause she was a girl. And apparently was planning to kill, if it was tom. Then their weird toxic relationship. Worst of all he ignored politics for so long then suffered because of it even tho he knew advantage of politics in his past life. Have you read the artificier legacy? Even that had some cool ideas.