Couple of points get a beta or get a spell checker or something like grammarly. The first few chapters move way to quickly and maybe dont use cliches? The ignored third child has been overused same with the arrogant children of the prophecy. Minato is a sensor no way he doesnt notice his youngest son have active chakra. Kushina should also be capable of negative emotion sensing through Kurama so maybe do some proper checking even if it is a au universe.
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