Review Detail of AboutMe01 in The Dimensional Trader

I know I know. This is my opinion about this story. Bad grammar, wrong pronunciation, etc. I only have one brain and it's already kinda full of junk. If there is a mistake in the story please let me know, I didn't bite too hard Do you know? Using translate is a bit troublesome for me. Sometimes it changes what I write. Or do I need to make two versions? One Indonesian( You can use Google translate to read ) and one English ( My bad grammar). Give your honest opinion