The premise of the story is good, but I just can't let go of the grammar mistakes. it's too confusing to understand. Will you please please choose one name only!!!!! why does everyone name and gender change like day and night!! The time I waste trying to figure out who you're referring to makes it harder for me to be pulled into the story. Also, please stop referring to everyone by their first and last names.
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