Review Detail of Jack_Wilder in Carnal Cultivation

Two things honey and a hatchet. one this story is really good. it feels like... well real people, they act in ways they should and they feel like they are in love, like really in love, something a lot of "romance" writers don't actually do correctly, I was only going to read a chapter or two but I found myself really invested in the relationship between the too main characters. it's a joy to read and I highly recommend it. but there is the hatchet. the book is has terrible world building, which isn't a deal breaker as the characters are what in here for but there is a lot details that are only partially explained, and maybe the powers are only temporary? it's unclear on the book but there are hints both ways. I think it needed to be clearer the rules of the story, the stakes and the possible rewards, and most importantly the power system they use, we need to be able to understand how strong our protagonists are compared to everything that could harm them. and the school system needs some clarification, also note to the author, so spoilers from now on. short circuiting, you introduced it retroactively, which is something you shouldn't so often, you need your readers to trust you so when your plot twists happen you don't have them not believing you are going to retroactively give him/her a power up, you still can but be careful, reader trust is more important then any plot point, and another note, if you wrote a pure romance story without any r18 I'd definitely read it. I had to skip over those parts for personal reasons, so if you do end up making one in sure it will be great, thanks for making me smile and laugh the whole time, and good luck, I known you are going places