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It’s an alright novel, good idea and execution. The world is set out great. A few problems though, the male lead is honestly a little too controlling. The twins are nice. I’m gonna be honest, while I enjoyed the book, it’s not worth paying money, the sentence structure, grammar, and chapter setup is bad, one scene repeated twice, went to a different scene, then repeated the scene and finally moved on. Constant misspellings and the main character seemingly changes, that or we get a new character out of the blue. So I’d give most of it 5s besides writing quality, story development, and obviously update stability. I’d suggest if you’re looking for a random novel to just check out for 40 chapters read it, but if you’re looking for a novel worth investing your time and or money then find something else. Great story but I also have to be fair here
Summoned to be a Weapon
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Of course, so here is my response and reply’s: First I am aware of Cruz being just a random male character, by controlling I meant Ragni immediately forcing them to act in ways they normally wouldn’t. I have read each chapter that was free beside the two unlock ones that are strewn in between(which I fast passed.) Second, I would suggest the app or website grammarly, the free version is great and the paid is extra. Third, I was talking about the scene/chapter after Ragni gets out of the hole, you had Ragni’s pov, the twins, and the attacker. It comes across more repetetively when you space them across different chapters. Lastly, what I mean by “the main character seemingly changes, that or we get a new character out of the blue” is that when you went to switch pov’s you didn’t give us a clear warning, it was also never communicated that were multiple Leads. Something like changing i between them during the traveling in the wild, it would be easier to ease the leads together and we wouldn’t be thrown into a different setting in the blink of an eye. The main issue of the multiple leads is that while it’s cool to have multiple, a good amount was purely the twins and ragni, time passed, training with Ragni, stopping in town, finding a tattoo on Ragni. So if you were reading this, what you would see is a bunch of chapters being purely about the 3 present leads and then out of nowhere a day passes and we have new leads for some reason and the twins are gone for awhile. There was no clear knowledge of the multiple leads or pov switches and it just seemed thrown together. The multiple leads and the multiple perspective viewpoints don’t have a warning or any indicator. A good example would be:[attacker] POV. You put that in the same chapter of the other pov and then we have clear knowledge that there’s a switch in pov’s
Kamon772:Hello, this is the author of Summoned to be a Weapon. I would first like to thank you for reading and reviewing my story as you have done. In regard to your review, I have written these replies: [A few problems though, the male lead is honestly a little too controlling. The twins are nice.] The twins are the two female main characters of this story. Rangi, the male main character of the story, does not appear at least currently until around chapter 9. There is a male character that appears before chapter 9 named Cruz Dusti however though they have a role in the story it is more akin to that of a side character than a major character. Their role was just one of one for dealing with what happened after the twins had been turned into weapons yet were dormant until first awakened by Rangi. [the sentence structure, grammar, and chapter setup is bad] I am aware of my grammatical and spelling shortcomings however at the moment perfecting them is not as simple as just doing it though. As for the character set up I have already gone through the process of attempting to make it more streamlined already. What comes next is merely carrying out the changes that I have made to the overall story itself. [went to a different scene, then repeated the scene] The repeated scenes might possibly be similar scenes but the intent is to show them from different view points. [the main character seemingly changes, that or we get a new character out of the blue.] Though to address 'the main character changes and new character out of the blue issue' as the twins and Rangi are the three primary main characters however there are other main characters besides them. I would like to know a little more detail than what you have provided currently to address the issue properly.
Hello, this is the author of Summoned to be a Weapon. I would first like to thank you for reading and reviewing my story as you have done. In regard to your review, I have written these replies: [A few problems though, the male lead is honestly a little too controlling. The twins are nice.] The twins are the two female main characters of this story. Rangi, the male main character of the story, does not appear at least currently until around chapter 9. There is a male character that appears before chapter 9 named Cruz Dusti however though they have a role in the story it is more akin to that of a side character than a major character. Their role was just one of one for dealing with what happened after the twins had been turned into weapons yet were dormant until first awakened by Rangi. [the sentence structure, grammar, and chapter setup is bad] I am aware of my grammatical and spelling shortcomings however at the moment perfecting them is not as simple as just doing it though. As for the character set up I have already gone through the process of attempting to make it more streamlined already. What comes next is merely carrying out the changes that I have made to the overall story itself. [went to a different scene, then repeated the scene] The repeated scenes might possibly be similar scenes but the intent is to show them from different view points. [the main character seemingly changes, that or we get a new character out of the blue.] Though to address 'the main character changes and new character out of the blue issue' as the twins and Rangi are the three primary main characters however there are other main characters besides them. I would like to know a little more detail than what you have provided currently to address the issue properly.