Review Detail of Febfew in I Am Fugaku Uchiha
Review detail
Author, there are several errors in your work up to chapter 8, I will mention just a few. Script errors in which you yourself contradict yourself: two or three times Fugaku's powers and his mastery of them are denied shortly after being affirmed. And information errors about the main work: You almost doubled the number of ninjas in Konoha, having that number was impossible during the 2nd war (information from the 2nd~4th war and population increase during the period). They have a maximum of 18 thousand ninjas at the time of the 2nd war, the number you put in your fanfic is impossible even at the time of the 4th war; increased the number of Uchiha Clan ninjas with equal exaggeration; and for the Uchiha clan to be a rival to the Senju, Hyuga and be able to face other clans, it must have at least 400 ninjas with Sharingan or it would have been exterminated even before the time of the villages. The fanfic is good. But these contradictions end the story and a tip: the public will want such information because you yourself started quoting them and will end up with headaches.
I Am Fugaku Uchiha
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I remembered that you reviewed it when you posted it and took it seriously. Unfortunately, I haven't been able to manage some time since then, and now that I've gone to look into the errors, there are quite a few. I've proofread those chapters, and I hope they meet your expectations. Thank you for letting me know.
If you want to rewrite the fanfic, there are a lot of things that can be reused. It's a lot of information, but you can do it, just be calm and tackle the work part by part. I can still change my ratings and there are reviews of your fanfic that are not valid because they simply don't like Fugaku or for another reason not linked to the script itself...
When I have time I will edit my review and read the edited chapters. The story is good by the way, please don't abandon it. And a tip, I'm actually repeating something in a little more detail: Be careful when passing on information from the canon, especially when it comes to numbers, powers and interpersonal relationships. Example 1: there are people who think that Rin liked Obito, even though it is confirmed that she liked Kakashi. Example 2: a lot of people (mainly Itachi fans) think that Sasuke's amaterasu was given to him by Itachi, when in fact it is a very absurd jutsu of the common Sharingan used by Itachi three times in the anime (Shisui's crow in Naruto in the 4th ° war, on the day he leaves Konoha causing the double "suicide" of Danzo's subordinates who wanted to kill him and finally the amaterasu he implanted in Sasuke to kill Obito) and Madara once (to survive the final battle against Hashirama) . This jutsu is basically indefensible and undetectable, and can implant a Sharingan power or its evolutions in the target or user (it can be any Sharingan power/jutsu, from genjutsu, izanagi and even amaterasu), the user can still apparently define only a single trigger/situation for automatic activation of the deployed jutsu. These are just a few examples, there are many others that are complicated.
stylish_slayer:I remembered that you reviewed it when you posted it and took it seriously. Unfortunately, I haven't been able to manage some time since then, and now that I've gone to look into the errors, there are quite a few. I've proofread those chapters, and I hope they meet your expectations. Thank you for letting me know.