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Dao_Creation_God
Dao_Creation_GodLv126mthDao_Creation_God

I will give this novel a solid 3 stars, I like the premise but I feel that this novel isn't for me, but I will also say what I believe would make it more for me. 1st to much slang, as far as I understood it so is the MC's age in the 15-18 age bracket. BUT the slang makes me think of him as in either of one of two groups, less than 10 and over 35. Less than 10 because it reminds me of kids who just tries to use every slang they know to try and sound older. Over 35 because it reminds me of older adults learning slang to try and be more "hip" than they actually are. It feels rather weird in how he talks to himself/us when he uses excessive amounts of slang. 2nd, is he a coward; brave one; or a loser. Which is his real him? Was his reserved nature something forced by society (bullying), and his brave persona is his real nature, OR is this a coping mechanism? 3rd, too little time is spent in his ant-form before he evolves into a human. And I personally believe that even if his human-form is because of his human soul so should it still be too early if he doesn't have any major differences (external skeleton/scales, antenna, etc.) in the human realm, since MONSTERS should be human LIKE not human. 4th, too little time is spent on the system and it's abilities, some skills/abilities would have been fun to see in the shop, how is the cost of skill bestowal decided, is it purely by strength of the parties or is it more complex than that. 5th, when writing about others which isn't in the immediate story/arc, please do that either in a separate chapter or make it easier to differentiate from the rest of the chapter with ****** or -------

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Evolution begins with an ant colony

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Zurbluris
ZurblurisAuthorZurbluris

amazing 😍 I would have you know I'm secretly working on replacement chapters for the current 20 chapters where I fix all these problems, all I hope for is when I have fixed these problems you will come back to read

Dao_Creation_God
Dao_Creation_GodLv12Dao_Creation_God

Sure, time to wait for me then

Zurbluris:amazing 😍 I would have you know I'm secretly working on replacement chapters for the current 20 chapters where I fix all these problems, all I hope for is when I have fixed these problems you will come back to read
Zurbluris
ZurblurisAuthorZurbluris

have rewritten 5 chapters, check em out 👀 would love some comments btw

Dao_Creation_God:Sure, time to wait for me then