Review Detail of ShadowSpikeLion in Bloodline: my bro ace got caught in war my family go to war with navy

I'll be honest I love the idea of this story the main problem I have is what is happening. you can understand snippets here and there to get the idea of what is going on in a scene but there isn't cohesion between scenes not counting the constant switching from Chinese to English names. if you can go through it and rewrite it to where a whole chapter is legible I would be happy to reread it and give a great review.