Review Detail of ForbiddenMe in Phantasm Journey

After my last Review, The author has edited so much and it's only fair that I drop another now. Starting with the blurb, which gives a general idea of what the story is about like it should. Nothing more, Nothing less. The First chapter ---- Most of WN writers don't care about making their first chapters 'a hook', but the Author handled it very well, the first chapter gives the over all idea about what kind of a person is MC and how he is viewed, definitely a great way to start a story. The Narrative style and the context of the descriptions are beautiful, However there are some minor grammatical errors, which is fine since the story is rather engaging. Minor grammatical errors and spelling errors can be managed as the Author practice writing in the long run, since English isn't their Mother Language. At first the dialogues seems bland but when you read further, it's the particular characters (Lanert's father) that are bland. My personal favorite was the Orc friend of Lanert----Gurken Losin. The world building is amazing as the author take it slow, not info dumping too much. Over all, it's a wonderfully written story with more great chapters to come hopefully. I hope the author continues to write this story until the very end :]