Awesome to hear you finally write a story, because i'm like you and now i'm not yet write a story, because my English still bad for write, but for advice you must have learn more about writing and make the reader fall in love with that, skill MC, world building, and story sometimes good sometimes bored, and finally i drop it, sorry bro, but glad to see you start writing, keep it up bro good luck, you have good idea for a story
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