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Is this mtl? On chapter 3, I felt funny when Lisa said was the MC looks like originated from liyue base in his looks, but the MC's name was Takerou which is originated from Inazuma. Isnt Lisa aint dumb, the she mistakenly guessing where MC originated is base on his looks but she knows his name where that name "Takerou" sounds like Inazuman. One thing Im certain is this was chinese mtl. So whats the original title? Or raw?
Genshin Impact: I Open Manga Store in Teyvat
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It's your work? Then please make MC talk less but act more. Don't describe in game quest too much, the protagonist don't feel like a protagonist much. Make non rewarded version of the Manga's for the ordinary people too please. Focus a bit more on the reactions to the manga itself. It's too focused on the rewards now. Describe MCs powers so that we understand why and How he is strong. Pokemon has High Tech stuff too ya know. Dialogues are too frequent, show not tell. Protagonist doesn't have to be just a mysterious OP dude. His personality feels non existent. He feels more like a plot device then actual plot devices. P.S:- As a reader, these are suggestions. Please write however you please and don't force yourself to change the plot. That will make you lose motivation. Just take my Opinions as an Idea.
Otaku_Weaboo:sry about that, I translated this novel from my own language, my English is not that good