The execution is just bad, starting right from the first chapter that serves no purpose whatsoever and his unnecessary demise or the way he loses is pointless, and what's the point of having a backstory if he loses all memories after reincarnation? In the Naruto universe, there is only Chakra, not premeval essence, or some made-up energy, get your facts straight. If you're going to introduce something new at least explain how it works, and a logical explanation how it's fits in the new world, like having stronger and purer Chakra that allows him a better control of jutsu using his experience of refining and current skills. His abilities are poorly presented, and his thoughts and goals are badly ordered and structured, His previous life is from ancient China not a modern word, so he can't have future knowledge unless he saw a glimpse future events in the river of time during reincarnation. The protagonist is adopted by the Uchiha clan, instead of an orphan or a member of the Hyuga clan, and him having Dao marks and Gu worms after reincarnation is ridiculous. Dao marks, Gu recipes, ranks, masteries, and Heavens Will, Last time I checked there was no such absurd concepts in the Naruto world, they simply do not and cannot exist in that universe. This is not even Naruto at this point, the lack of understanding of a Naruto fanfiction is evident, the events don't have a natural order, the writing style and pacing are bad, with broken sentences and random ramblings scattered throughout, along with constant mentions of the previous world which has no relation to the current one.
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LIKEcan you make a reading list of all the fics you think are goodyou seem like you have similar tastes as me
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Actually, you ruined the fanfic by adding another character from xianxia and hammering a nail into the fanfic by giving him a system, It would be better if he continued to survive without a system, ideally his abilities in cultivation should have been removed altogether, he should have survived in the world of naruto using only his rich life experience
Kelvar10_:Bruh, it's a fanfic. The author can add anything he wants, it doesn't have to be strictly Naruto 🤦♂️