Review Detail of tt_g in Legendary Multiversal Cafe
Review detail
There’s no driving factor behind the story at all. The mc just wants to run a coffee shop. There’s no twist like in IRNTDGL were the mc gives sagely advice. Nothing. Even in romcom story story the mc eventually gets a goal, which usually to fall in love. Also the mc has two character traits. Being kind and being a germaphobe. This is one of the most cookie cutter carboard characters I have read in a long time. I think this story is just kind of a nothing burger. It doesn’t function well as a slice of life or action story. The writing quality is pretty good but honestly it’s wasted by the fact that the story has no direction.
Legendary Multiversal Cafe
AgentMonke
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btw I was also worried about something like this, never wrote a Slice of Life before so, tryna figure out a balance here.
AgentMonke:also could you explain driving factor here? gave him the goal to ressurrect his mother thats a driving factor no? is it boring? let me know lol
Might’ve missed that part. I tend to skip some parts when the beginning is too lovey dovey and mushy. So many fics use the being born to a new family trope so it gets repetitive.
AgentMonke:also could you explain driving factor here? gave him the goal to ressurrect his mother thats a driving factor no? is it boring? let me know lol
I also have no idea what you’re trying to do here. Getting a mostly slice of life system in a world where violence occurs daily just doesn’t seem like a good idea. I guess you could’ve started him off with a easier world? The system and world just don’t seem compatible.
AgentMonke:btw I was also worried about something like this, never wrote a Slice of Life before so, tryna figure out a balance here.
tt_g:I also have no idea what you’re trying to do here. Getting a mostly slice of life system in a world where violence occurs daily just doesn’t seem like a good idea. I guess you could’ve started him off with a easier world? The system and world just don’t seem compatible.
