There are a few minor typos, such as "Mijolnir" instead of "Mjolnir" and "their" instead of "them" in the sentence "They had betrayed them, all of their." In some cases, words that should be capitalized are written in lowercase. For instance, "system" and "portals" should be capitalized since they refer to specific entities within the context of the story. There are a few more minor mistakes that can be easily corrected. Overall, the writing is engaging and well-crafted, and these small adjustments will help improve its clarity and coherence.
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