Review Detail of EvilBlueCrystal in Vegeta Hakaishin[Hiatus]
Review detail
The first chapter is where the protagonist spends his time getting some pointless wishes from God, And then the second chapter, the protagonist reincarnates without including any description of the surroundings, where It then turns into a mess of harem and boring conversation with Bulma. The battle training consists of lackluster descriptions, replaced with bland and monotonous words. Where's the excitement? Where's the tension? Then a random mention of Beerus in the distant future, that has nothing to do with current events. The protagonist just wishes for regeneration without any balance. The lack of progression in the first six chapters is like reading the descriptions of filler episodes. And even after that, when happens, it's just a copy of the original story. It fails to bring anything new to the table and instead relies on pointless conversations and badly written training sessions to fill the chapters. The dialogue is bad and completely unnatural, The protagonist acts more like Vegeta than an actual reincarnated MC, completely lacking any potential for a unique character, Not to mention the protagonist's uninteresting abilities.
Vegeta Hakaishin[Hiatus]
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Cat_Tip:Don’t even trust his judgment he takes the fanfic and compares it to a professionaly made novel he reviews everything and always has nothing good to say even on fanfics I love.
Fanfics aren't really that far off from published books. Having an editor is more than enough for these works to reach such quality. And the reviewer made a lot of legit points. He talked about the generic af intro featuring wishes and a ROB, followed by the non existent SI introduced in chapters that stall in their pacing. So which of these would be consider professional values? Better yet, I've read fanfic authors who are more than capable in avoiding such pit falls. Any book which follow anything I listed is not one I'd read. Its repoachable and should be called out for subpar writing. So where are the white knights when fics get 5 star spam reviews? I bet you all are just roasting the only legit response to a subpar work. Like right here for an example. Anyway, this response can be considered a more general trend in thinking that I've observed. I'm not the only one who'd say this.