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*Let it be known that this review is based on 4 wasted chapters on the Prologue itself and one other review that explained the core issues with this fic, which i myself agree with completely.**I'm not an experienced reviewer,so don't expect bullet points or specifics.**I also want to note that this isn't meant to be harsh criticism. Just thoughts on what i hoped would have been, had it been presented in a different manner.*I came in thinking that i was gonna read about a reincarnator who was just gonna get thrown into the narutoverse with demon slayer breathing techniques/skills/moves, as well as have what any great demon slayer/swordsman needs, which is a sword, be it notable ones from Enma From One Piece,Tessaiga From Inuyasha, Ea From Fate Series, Venuzdonoa From The Misfit,Murasame From Akame Ga Kill, Ryujin Jakka From Bleach..etc.. so many choices with minor restrictions because of the power the blades themselves wield to which the mc could have trained to overcome/ unlock /obtained at certain points in the story. I thought, "Narutoverse, Demon slayer, iconic sword, let the road to becoming the greatest Swordsman this world has ever seen begin," he gets into the world an bam, that's it. But no, this ended being the biggest wish fulfillment I've read so far, with an mc whose mentality is questionable for his age (which is 45yrs old)and past occupation as a former Spec Ops Soldier. The wishes in this story are questionable as well. The supposed "GOD" is more of a ROB, but I'm not gonna get into that. This is already far too long for a comment. This is my first time writing something this long, i guess it's cause these prologues have left much to be desired for something that could've been better executed. It's been said that first impressions are the most important,but so far, I'm not impressed. Good luck to the author, and I hope you don't take this as me bashing your work👍

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Naruto : The Demon Swordsman

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I am sorry to disappoint you. I agree that it turned out to be a wish fulfillment. The Mc became too overpowered. And the prologue was also quite long. In my defense it was my first time writing.Also while he has many strengths, he has to earn it. While he is strong, he is not at the level of Madara or Hashirama yet

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I apologize for the review looking like a bunch of mashed up words. It looked a lot more organized before posting.