Review Detail of GoldenStache in Test of the Divine

So far with it's only been 12 chapters but it looks promising, a few things to fix would be Damon's reaction in the first chapter, as it was too quick, some dialogue sounds unnatural, in chapter three, for reasons unspecified Damon knew things he shouldn't or atleast it wasn't mentioned why he did what he did, like how did he know that he could build a manor? and why do something as risky as pulling on his heart? These questions might have an answer that is mentioned later. The concept of the power itself is interesting and unique, the manor building, gathering faith to strengthen himself, the company, the world he is about to conquer, all those concepts are very promising. The writing is good, although a bit rushed in the earlier chapters, that could be easily fixed, the fights are very well done, and flow well, so yea all in all good novel, with a lot of promise that just needs a bit of editing.