Review Detail of Yashasvi_Singh_8993 in In Naruto With Minato Template
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This is just one of those thousands OP MC fanfics where the MC has everything figured out before he is even born For example Itachi Obito and Zetsu can definitely sense a 8 year old using jutsu And if finding root base was so easy then it would have been a tourist attraction at this point Not to mention he is just casually talking about using Hiraishin etc There was a reason why only Minato and Tobirama were albe to learn it not some 8 year old Zero focus on the character development the MC has zero personlity
In Naruto With Minato Template
kamidemond
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Sorry bro but the story just didn't feel right But the fact that you are willing to try and improve your story speaks loads about you as an author I will read the story every chapter and I will give you 5 stars when you improve No one writes a 5 star story on their first try All the best in the future
kamidemond:Well I am pretty new at writing 😅 I will definitely improve 🙏
Author, i think your writing is decent, you dont need to change it much. Just focus on logic part and you'd have a hit novel. The why and how of possiblities is what makes reading interesting, if it doesnt follow accepted logic or restriction then it'll just come off silly/cartoonish. Might work if its parody homor story but not for any other genre.
kamidemond:Well I am pretty new at writing 😅 I will definitely improve 🙏
hero4hire:Author, i think your writing is decent, you dont need to change it much. Just focus on logic part and you'd have a hit novel. The why and how of possiblities is what makes reading interesting, if it doesnt follow accepted logic or restriction then it'll just come off silly/cartoonish. Might work if its parody homor story but not for any other genre.
why do you have 3 active Naruto fics? Do you just wing it and look for comments of what to change and rewrte it in your 2nd and 3rd fic?
kamidemond:Well I am pretty new at writing 😅 I will definitely improve 🙏
Humbuub:why do you have 3 active Naruto fics? Do you just wing it and look for comments of what to change and rewrte it in your 2nd and 3rd fic?
Yashasvi_Singh_8993:Sorry bro but the story just didn't feel right But the fact that you are willing to try and improve your story speaks loads about you as an author I will read the story every chapter and I will give you 5 stars when you improve No one writes a 5 star story on their first try All the best in the future
Though that's good, you might develop a bad habit if you keep rushing and don't polish your fics properly.
kamidemond:yup I actually just write because i wanted to try writing nothing more
Humbuub:Though that's good, you might develop a bad habit if you keep rushing and don't polish your fics properly.
Humbuub:Though that's good, you might develop a bad habit if you keep rushing and don't polish your fics properly.
the root base part I can make a logical reason for, in earlier chapters it's stated he can sense naruto due to his emotion/chakra from across the city, and since danzos root bases are underground I'm sure his emotion/chakra stick out like a sore thumb aswell since he would be the only one underground
