Review Detail of M_Ni in The Nascent Bloodline

Item: The Nascent Bloodline
Rating: 4.8

Review detail

M_NiLv21yrM_Ni

I think it's a good story with wonderful word building. I like the character's and like someone else mentioned I would focuss on adding more dialogue in chapter one: create a scene where some things are explained in a setting. Other than that I like this story :D keep up the good work

The Nascent Bloodline

Paul_Okito

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Paul_OkitoAuthorPaul_Okito

Thanks for your feedback. I sincerely apologize for not using much dialogue. I will endeavor to do so. I really appreciate your review.

1yr

M_NiLv2M_Ni

Take your time with the first chapter, I'm sure you'll figure out how to set it up 😁👍

Paul_Okito:Thanks for your feedback. I sincerely apologize for not using much dialogue. I will endeavor to do so. I really appreciate your review.

1yr