Review Detail of Mr_Forgefire in Overhauled

No matter what this review states, keep writing and getting better, we cant be perfect. -REVIEW- I will say that for the most part this is one, if not the best, beginning for an mha fanfic on the site. Good execution, no needless padding of words, nothing unnecessary, and it's actually believable. No butt pulls out of nowhere or simple "since im smart" moments where very important things are glossed over. Honestly, 9/10 for the childhood arc alone. However, that rating falls when we get to UA. I have never understood the reason why in most mha fanfics everyone has a hate boner for Midoriya. Yeah he is spineless, yes he did nothing to train to be a hero, yes he gets no bitches (lol). But for the love of god he is 14. I get tired of 20+ year olds or whatever talking down to a literal kid as if he was supposed to have his life figured out by 14. I wanted to be a fireman at that age, yet you didnt see me running through fire, carrying fake bodies, and studying chemistry. That makes the rating drop by a bit, because at this point it becomes a push and pull of "I hate Midoriya" to "I need to help him so he can help me later" to "no, this my own story, fuck him" to "he needs to mature faster if canon changes" to etc etc. It is exhausting, would rather you kill him and be done with it, or be his friend and dont be overly helpful to the point of Being a slave. Pick a side and stick with it. Next, I can see the cracks of the story appearing. You want to keep canon the same, but at the same time ellude to it changing, then have the MC do things to keep it the same. The second (spoiler) Chisaki was killed canon was scrapped, please dont make it a carbon copy of the source material, thousands of those already exist. It seems like After the childhood arc the story feels lost, no real direction, and not in a mysterious way either. Annoying if anything. However. I hope you continue to write, and this is coming from someone who writes mha fanfics and gave up because of how hard it was to make it work, so don't give up 👍🏽