Review Detail of TranslatorKun in Rambling and Random bullshittery

This is an honest review of your novel. First of all the positives, are good chapter length, good dialogues that seem genuine, and some lines that carry emotion. Now, the main problem with your novel is the English. In fact, it is so good that it feels unreadable. There are many readers whose first language is not English like me, they can't read the stuff past 2-3 chapters until they relate with your novel or want to desperately read something that your novel caters to. My advice would be to keep the lines and dialogues that carry emotion as it is but try to write the lines that carry information or world-building in simpler English that is easy to understand and grammatically correct.