Review Detail of Himjim in HOTD/ASOIAF: Unbowed Unbent Unbroken

Great story, needs a beta though. A lot of run-on sentences. Some of them seem to be on purpose to inflate word count possibly. I could be wrong, if so apologies. Sometimes their is a case of over explaining. Ch 8, when Rhaenyra, Aemma, and Saera are talking about Daella and their childhoods Minor nitpick on my behalf. But saying kids, mom, and dad breaks my suspension of disbelief. Instead of mother, father and children/child. The first read I enjoyed it enough to gloss over it, which tends to happen. The second read I couldn't help but notice. Other than that great story