Review Detail of DoSomething in The 100 [Viking]

Clarke is fine but I think Octavia is also a nice pice of a**.

Hi, first of all I love the story it has a lot of potential but there a two things that are bugging me. First is the fact that Clark is part of the 100 I mean I know she is one of the MC's of the story but in the original the reason why she is part of the 100 is to keep her mouth shut ( her father discovered the oxygen issue in the station. he and Clark wanted to tell everyone so he got floated and she got imprisoned and then sent to earth) but in your story the father is alive so the reason for her to be sent to prison is gone unless her father found out the problem and didn't want to tell everyone but she did ( basically you should give a reason why she was in isolation for a year). Second is the issue of the flashbacks of Erik's first life, we get a look at his first like without warning wich is confusing. For example the chapter that starts with erik's ( ivar's) village being attacked once the scene is finished we come to an erik speaking to the 100 but what is the link between the two? Why talk about it if it doesn't have an influence on the rest of the chapter? Despite the two issues mentioned above the sorry is great. Keep on the good work 👍👌

In response to the first question, Clarke's father is still alive, given that Erik saved him. It's crucial to remember that everything changed the instant Erik (also known as Ivar) reincarnated, even if the reason Clarke was still imprisoned will be detailed in a different chapter. Changes are therefore necessary. The answer to the second query about the connection between Erik and Ivar is that they are one and the same. Ivar's reincarnation is Erik; in fact, Ivar is Erik. I'm sorry if this was unclear. Due to my recent work editing the chapters, I am currently exhausted. I might have made mistakes because I'm new to this. If you have any queries or require clarification, do let me know, and I will try to clear up any confusion you have.

Thanks for answering. First off I got those fact (sorry if I expressed myself wrongly) and kinda guest after reading the part with Bellamy that Ivar/Erik influenced some parts of the event on the ark. Regarding what I mentioned about the link between Erik and Ivar I meant the transition between the event like you talk about Ivar wich I get is Erik but why are you talking about it at that moment? Is Erik thinking about his past life? Do those event aide him in the predicament he is in with the 99 other at that moment? It feels more like you forgot to mention this seen in the first chapter and added along the way ( sorry if offended) the flow of the story would be more smooth if that part was explained in the beginning when he talk about his revenge fuelled life as ivar. Don't get me wrong this piece of information is important but at the wrong place. There is no link between the two event except that there is ivar. Unless there is a lesson to be learn from those events 🤔🤔that I didn't get and if so you can ignore my comment.