First off its a decent story worth a read, the only problems are the inconsistent chapter sizes, sometimes they’ll be extremely short sometimes long. Next is the character detail, it’s only been 6 chapters I understand that but there’s been multiple time skips and we don’ even have a grasp on the character, like his relationship with luminara, we were given minimal details but was never built on then she dies and he kills them, hopefully you see what I’m getting at here anyway it’s a decent read
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