Review Detail of Devil_Gamer_0071 in Naruto: immortal Ninja

Author-san u gotta improve. It looks more like those "Reading of a Novel" types. Its in the form of a summary with some dialogue or interaction. I also urge you to drop the Essay foat of writing. Seeing all those big paragraphs already forms a reluctance to read for us readers. Also its difficult to find the part we stopped reading if its in some where between the big fat paragraphs. Using short paragraph will make the chapters more pleasant to read. Grammer is quite good so no issues there. I am saying this cauz i have checked the writing quality of the chapters. But i will admit i have not progressed much with the story. No doubt the story might be good but i feel reluctant to read those big fat paragraphs. Thats all. [img=recommend]