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Little_El
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Realistic comments here I was very excited about the power he was going to have but ended up being disappointed. The writing is childish, the MC is weird and his feelings useless in the moments used, MC is already trying to control himself when he has just woken up in the middle of a genocide, in short everything is badly organized.

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The Monk in the MCU

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Cedric_7512
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How would you change it then? I'd do well with some tips my friend

TheMotherLand
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How to write engaging descriptions: Make descriptions more memorable and engaging. Avoid cliches. Focus on details specific to the point of view: How does the point of view character perceive the world? Example: “How do you describe a werewolf?” Is the wrong question; “How does the protagonist see a werewolf?’ is the question. The answer is: “It depends on whether they are a werewolf-hunter or someone trying to run away.” Example text: “She breathed in. The creature’s musk was there, like a wet dog.” The protagonist comparing the creature to a wet dog tell readers how she doesn’t have much empathy for werewolves. How they are nothing but dogs to her. Include the senses: Sight, sound, touch, taste, and smell. Sensory details add a visceral dimension to a scene, inspiring emotion from readers. Favor strong verbs and adjectives: Verbs and adjectives feel “strong” when they evoke a feeling or give a new way of thinking. Attempt to replace “was” with a stronger verb or adjective. Example sentence: She was even more irritated because the afternoon heat was on her, and her too-frilly dress was sticking to her skin. Improved version with verbs and adjectives: Her irritation only festered as the afternoon heat bore down, and her too-frilly dress shrink-wrapped her skin. Don’t replace “was” in every instance, but if you want to spice up a descriptive moment, replacing “was” is an easy fix. Move the narrative forward: Good description advances the story forward. It relates to whatever the character is thinking or doing in the scene. Don’t describe everything: Use a descriptive style that fits with the character’s perspective, the overall tone of the story, and the type of scene you’re writing. The job of the author is not just to describe a scene or show us what’s there but to contextualize it for the reader, to show us what matters.

Cedric_7512:How would you change it then? I'd do well with some tips my friend
Demiurge_Ohara
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TheMotherLand:How to write engaging descriptions: Make descriptions more memorable and engaging. Avoid cliches. Focus on details specific to the point of view: How does the point of view character perceive the world? Example: “How do you describe a werewolf?” Is the wrong question; “How does the protagonist see a werewolf?’ is the question. The answer is: “It depends on whether they are a werewolf-hunter or someone trying to run away.” Example text: “She breathed in. The creature’s musk was there, like a wet dog.” The protagonist comparing the creature to a wet dog tell readers how she doesn’t have much empathy for werewolves. How they are nothing but dogs to her. Include the senses: Sight, sound, touch, taste, and smell. Sensory details add a visceral dimension to a scene, inspiring emotion from readers. Favor strong verbs and adjectives: Verbs and adjectives feel “strong” when they evoke a feeling or give a new way of thinking. Attempt to replace “was” with a stronger verb or adjective. Example sentence: She was even more irritated because the afternoon heat was on her, and her too-frilly dress was sticking to her skin. Improved version with verbs and adjectives: Her irritation only festered as the afternoon heat bore down, and her too-frilly dress shrink-wrapped her skin. Don’t replace “was” in every instance, but if you want to spice up a descriptive moment, replacing “was” is an easy fix. Move the narrative forward: Good description advances the story forward. It relates to whatever the character is thinking or doing in the scene. Don’t describe everything: Use a descriptive style that fits with the character’s perspective, the overall tone of the story, and the type of scene you’re writing. The job of the author is not just to describe a scene or show us what’s there but to contextualize it for the reader, to show us what matters.
Herohero
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TheMotherLand:How to write engaging descriptions: Make descriptions more memorable and engaging. Avoid cliches. Focus on details specific to the point of view: How does the point of view character perceive the world? Example: “How do you describe a werewolf?” Is the wrong question; “How does the protagonist see a werewolf?’ is the question. The answer is: “It depends on whether they are a werewolf-hunter or someone trying to run away.” Example text: “She breathed in. The creature’s musk was there, like a wet dog.” The protagonist comparing the creature to a wet dog tell readers how she doesn’t have much empathy for werewolves. How they are nothing but dogs to her. Include the senses: Sight, sound, touch, taste, and smell. Sensory details add a visceral dimension to a scene, inspiring emotion from readers. Favor strong verbs and adjectives: Verbs and adjectives feel “strong” when they evoke a feeling or give a new way of thinking. Attempt to replace “was” with a stronger verb or adjective. Example sentence: She was even more irritated because the afternoon heat was on her, and her too-frilly dress was sticking to her skin. Improved version with verbs and adjectives: Her irritation only festered as the afternoon heat bore down, and her too-frilly dress shrink-wrapped her skin. Don’t replace “was” in every instance, but if you want to spice up a descriptive moment, replacing “was” is an easy fix. Move the narrative forward: Good description advances the story forward. It relates to whatever the character is thinking or doing in the scene. Don’t describe everything: Use a descriptive style that fits with the character’s perspective, the overall tone of the story, and the type of scene you’re writing. The job of the author is not just to describe a scene or show us what’s there but to contextualize it for the reader, to show us what matters.
CommanderBullshit
CommanderBullshitLv13CommanderBullshit

Thank you friend I needed this too

TheMotherLand:How to write engaging descriptions: Make descriptions more memorable and engaging. Avoid cliches. Focus on details specific to the point of view: How does the point of view character perceive the world? Example: “How do you describe a werewolf?” Is the wrong question; “How does the protagonist see a werewolf?’ is the question. The answer is: “It depends on whether they are a werewolf-hunter or someone trying to run away.” Example text: “She breathed in. The creature’s musk was there, like a wet dog.” The protagonist comparing the creature to a wet dog tell readers how she doesn’t have much empathy for werewolves. How they are nothing but dogs to her. Include the senses: Sight, sound, touch, taste, and smell. Sensory details add a visceral dimension to a scene, inspiring emotion from readers. Favor strong verbs and adjectives: Verbs and adjectives feel “strong” when they evoke a feeling or give a new way of thinking. Attempt to replace “was” with a stronger verb or adjective. Example sentence: She was even more irritated because the afternoon heat was on her, and her too-frilly dress was sticking to her skin. Improved version with verbs and adjectives: Her irritation only festered as the afternoon heat bore down, and her too-frilly dress shrink-wrapped her skin. Don’t replace “was” in every instance, but if you want to spice up a descriptive moment, replacing “was” is an easy fix. Move the narrative forward: Good description advances the story forward. It relates to whatever the character is thinking or doing in the scene. Don’t describe everything: Use a descriptive style that fits with the character’s perspective, the overall tone of the story, and the type of scene you’re writing. The job of the author is not just to describe a scene or show us what’s there but to contextualize it for the reader, to show us what matters.
Alax_Gecko
Alax_GeckoLv4Alax_Gecko

mantaege
mantaegeLv3mantaege

TheMotherLand:How to write engaging descriptions: Make descriptions more memorable and engaging. Avoid cliches. Focus on details specific to the point of view: How does the point of view character perceive the world? Example: “How do you describe a werewolf?” Is the wrong question; “How does the protagonist see a werewolf?’ is the question. The answer is: “It depends on whether they are a werewolf-hunter or someone trying to run away.” Example text: “She breathed in. The creature’s musk was there, like a wet dog.” The protagonist comparing the creature to a wet dog tell readers how she doesn’t have much empathy for werewolves. How they are nothing but dogs to her. Include the senses: Sight, sound, touch, taste, and smell. Sensory details add a visceral dimension to a scene, inspiring emotion from readers. Favor strong verbs and adjectives: Verbs and adjectives feel “strong” when they evoke a feeling or give a new way of thinking. Attempt to replace “was” with a stronger verb or adjective. Example sentence: She was even more irritated because the afternoon heat was on her, and her too-frilly dress was sticking to her skin. Improved version with verbs and adjectives: Her irritation only festered as the afternoon heat bore down, and her too-frilly dress shrink-wrapped her skin. Don’t replace “was” in every instance, but if you want to spice up a descriptive moment, replacing “was” is an easy fix. Move the narrative forward: Good description advances the story forward. It relates to whatever the character is thinking or doing in the scene. Don’t describe everything: Use a descriptive style that fits with the character’s perspective, the overall tone of the story, and the type of scene you’re writing. The job of the author is not just to describe a scene or show us what’s there but to contextualize it for the reader, to show us what matters.
prettymuchcalvin
prettymuchcalvinLv11prettymuchcalvin

Chatgpt is a wonderful thing

TheMotherLand:How to write engaging descriptions: Make descriptions more memorable and engaging. Avoid cliches. Focus on details specific to the point of view: How does the point of view character perceive the world? Example: “How do you describe a werewolf?” Is the wrong question; “How does the protagonist see a werewolf?’ is the question. The answer is: “It depends on whether they are a werewolf-hunter or someone trying to run away.” Example text: “She breathed in. The creature’s musk was there, like a wet dog.” The protagonist comparing the creature to a wet dog tell readers how she doesn’t have much empathy for werewolves. How they are nothing but dogs to her. Include the senses: Sight, sound, touch, taste, and smell. Sensory details add a visceral dimension to a scene, inspiring emotion from readers. Favor strong verbs and adjectives: Verbs and adjectives feel “strong” when they evoke a feeling or give a new way of thinking. Attempt to replace “was” with a stronger verb or adjective. Example sentence: She was even more irritated because the afternoon heat was on her, and her too-frilly dress was sticking to her skin. Improved version with verbs and adjectives: Her irritation only festered as the afternoon heat bore down, and her too-frilly dress shrink-wrapped her skin. Don’t replace “was” in every instance, but if you want to spice up a descriptive moment, replacing “was” is an easy fix. Move the narrative forward: Good description advances the story forward. It relates to whatever the character is thinking or doing in the scene. Don’t describe everything: Use a descriptive style that fits with the character’s perspective, the overall tone of the story, and the type of scene you’re writing. The job of the author is not just to describe a scene or show us what’s there but to contextualize it for the reader, to show us what matters.
TheMotherLand
TheMotherLandLv4TheMotherLand

Not chatgpt, they’re notes I took from watching YouTube videos. All word for word from the videos.

prettymuchcalvin:Chatgpt is a wonderful thing
Penduduk_Lokal
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Cool 👍🏻

TheMotherLand:How to write engaging descriptions: Make descriptions more memorable and engaging. Avoid cliches. Focus on details specific to the point of view: How does the point of view character perceive the world? Example: “How do you describe a werewolf?” Is the wrong question; “How does the protagonist see a werewolf?’ is the question. The answer is: “It depends on whether they are a werewolf-hunter or someone trying to run away.” Example text: “She breathed in. The creature’s musk was there, like a wet dog.” The protagonist comparing the creature to a wet dog tell readers how she doesn’t have much empathy for werewolves. How they are nothing but dogs to her. Include the senses: Sight, sound, touch, taste, and smell. Sensory details add a visceral dimension to a scene, inspiring emotion from readers. Favor strong verbs and adjectives: Verbs and adjectives feel “strong” when they evoke a feeling or give a new way of thinking. Attempt to replace “was” with a stronger verb or adjective. Example sentence: She was even more irritated because the afternoon heat was on her, and her too-frilly dress was sticking to her skin. Improved version with verbs and adjectives: Her irritation only festered as the afternoon heat bore down, and her too-frilly dress shrink-wrapped her skin. Don’t replace “was” in every instance, but if you want to spice up a descriptive moment, replacing “was” is an easy fix. Move the narrative forward: Good description advances the story forward. It relates to whatever the character is thinking or doing in the scene. Don’t describe everything: Use a descriptive style that fits with the character’s perspective, the overall tone of the story, and the type of scene you’re writing. The job of the author is not just to describe a scene or show us what’s there but to contextualize it for the reader, to show us what matters.