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It's a bit weird. Eren character is completely chopped and doesn't feel like himself. Another problem this story has is the transition between scenes. How Eren, Izuku, and All might be in Japan but when they see an attack in the USA, they for some reason go there. We don't get any explanation how, why they'd go there when All might should know his students are properly trained yet. This ff might need a rework or a big change if there is this much problem in the beginning...

MHA:The Founder’s return

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Yep will do sometime tommorrow

iiuminox:It’s all good, but them going to USA might need to be reworked very much or deleted since it really doesn’t make any sense
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Oh dang I’l make sure to rewrite the beginning parts for it to make sense.

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It’s all good, but them going to USA might need to be reworked very much or deleted since it really doesn’t make any sense

Board:Oh dang I’l make sure to rewrite the beginning parts for it to make sense.