Review Detail of WoahBuddy in *Re-writing* NARUTO: DUAL KAMUI in a cultivation world
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I read a few chapters. I like the whole idea of Kamui powers in a cultivation novel. The progression had a nice flow in each chapter. I also like the system MC has because it feels sentient. This story has The Gamer vibes, which is interesting. I think the biggest issue for this story would be the writing quality. I saw a few simple mistakes in spelling, punctuation, and extending sentences. Most scenes feel forced and uneventful. Dialogue seems to be rushed and monotonous. Overall, this isn't that good to me, but I think most people would like this story. I'll give this a 3.5/5.
*Re-writing* NARUTO: DUAL KAMUI in a cultivation world
Rgendamushrooms123
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Thnxs for your riview! This is my first time writing so there might be some spelling and punctuation mistakes but i will improve it as the story progresses. The events are a bit lacking in the start as I am trying to build up to a bigger plot twist And i don't think the character interaction are forced, one lost his memories while the other was Transmigrated naturally making the MC careful and doubtful of his surrounding One is pure from the start while the mc's personality is constantly changing due to the system. I structure there interaction in such a way that everything they talk was connected with a context (for eg why he called him lil bro even with his memory loss)so I don't think the character interaction are forced but I do acknowledge that the execution of Dialogues were a bit lacking but I will try to improve on it. thnkx for ur honest review
