Review Detail of WriterTheos in I Fell In Love With The Demon Lord

After reviewing the first chapter I can conclude that it's overall an OK chapter. First off, the Grammer is good for the most part, however, there are minor mistakes. I reccomended using grammarly to fix those. The story so far is slightly confusing and we don't get much background information and just dive into the story without even knowing who our main character is, which is the most important part of any novel. I can't say much about the story development etc because it's a very short read but I would reccomended working on your Grammar, creating a foundation for the story, creating a laid out character which we can follow, and also a better format of writing that has more descriptions and is written in a more realistic pace.