Review Detail of CarsonRome_432 in Villain: Destiny Transfer System
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Is the MC and the author sick in the head? The system said that the kids family reinforcements were coming and the MC told himself to finish the fight fast. Yet instead of fighting With the full power of tenth stage enlightenment realm, he lowered his strength to match the enemies first level enlightenment realm. With the ridiculous excuse of knowing thy enemy? How pathetic. As you would expect from the stupid actions of a braindead MC, reinforcements came and he had to flee, not finishing his fight and killing a member of he protagonist team. Not to mention, the writing quality truly isn't good, I feel like the cultivation realms are too rushed and there is no emphasis on how age and cultivation base releases to talent. And why would someone at the first level of enlightenment realm be able to fight someone in the fifth level? Is the boost of power within cultivation realms so low? Honestly, this novel is average now that I think bout it. No offense author, that's the truth.
Villain: Destiny Transfer System
YAMRAAJ_021
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What you said is not wrong in starting I didn't think much about plot holes and just wanted to rush things and this led to me a pretty big problem since I'm just a newbie author I'm trying to strive for improvement and in future I promise I will correct all my past mistakes and hope you reader's point out more mistakes so I can correct them.
It has potential especially for a book written by a new author. My thoughts on the subject is to try and limit the speed at which the MC breaks through. At least make sure that the explanation for his extremely fast breakthrough speed is full proof. And elixir that makes someone break through from late With refinement to mid stage foundation establishment is truly too exaggerated. If such an elixir exists, why isn't there any mention of it in the market? Why can't it be made by alchemists? If the level of the elixir is of a higher grade than what the alchemists in the current world background can make, then how did such a medicine find its way into a rock in a sect thoroughly escaping the notice of higher level cultivators just waiting for someone to pick up. And not just anyone, a normal sect disciple for that matter. These are just one of the points I feel should be looked into. thanks for responding
YAMRAAJ_021:What you said is not wrong in starting I didn't think much about plot holes and just wanted to rush things and this led to me a pretty big problem since I'm just a newbie author I'm trying to strive for improvement and in future I promise I will correct all my past mistakes and hope you reader's point out more mistakes so I can correct them.
đ¤ I should explain this more thoroughly and please point out more problems after reading chapter 12-15 as from there my writing style improved a bit.
CarsonRome_432:It has potential especially for a book written by a new author. My thoughts on the subject is to try and limit the speed at which the MC breaks through. At least make sure that the explanation for his extremely fast breakthrough speed is full proof. And elixir that makes someone break through from late With refinement to mid stage foundation establishment is truly too exaggerated. If such an elixir exists, why isn't there any mention of it in the market? Why can't it be made by alchemists? If the level of the elixir is of a higher grade than what the alchemists in the current world background can make, then how did such a medicine find its way into a rock in a sect thoroughly escaping the notice of higher level cultivators just waiting for someone to pick up. And not just anyone, a normal sect disciple for that matter. These are just one of the points I feel should be looked into. thanks for responding
the your is still great it just needs some improvement like the fact he doesn't put much thought in his actions he could ran back to sect to make a break through he makes a break through expecting his enemy to write for his death he should be more cunning and smart now let's think about the horein he look for them and steel them before hero gets them and some villains who don't love them he should also steel a divine dual cultivation technique that improves the body the physique of both parties and bloodline and soul
Zavia_6318:the your is still great it just needs some improvement like the fact he doesn't put much thought in his actions he could ran back to sect to make a break through he makes a break through expecting his enemy to write for his death he should be more cunning and smart now let's think about the horein he look for them and steel them before hero gets them and some villains who don't love them he should also steel a divine dual cultivation technique that improves the body the physique of both parties and bloodline and soul