Review Detail of Ornoth in Erotic RPG: I am in the Game world, But My Heroines are Villainesses
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The story has potential. Unfortunately the Author doesn't know how to unearth that. It has way too many inconsistencies it's getting annoying.
Erotic RPG: I am in the Game world, But My Heroines are Villainesses
Darkness_Enjoyer
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I legit hate it when people only read the first ten chapters and give a review about a story that has yet to bloom and show its good points. I also don't like the fact that people seem to think a person should always think in the same line that never changes. Because in the beginning, his two souls got merged, MC didn't even have the time to think and feel the emotions that might trigger as time goes because of some words, and I wanted to show that a person's thoughts wouldn't be stable the moment they transmigrated because IT DOESN'T MAKE SENSE. Legit, I think most people don't want a human but a robot as MC nowadays. Anyway, I won't delete this review and even pin it. For those who want an MC whose thoughts never change, please don't read my book and look for others.
u are only pointing out the major inconsistency not the minor ones like getting bloodthorn herb from kitchen and then saying that blood thorn herbs are very rare with 9 star beast guarding it? also when he confronts noah to talk to him how did he suddenly get commoner clothes? also the charm it was 9.9 but suddenly became 5.5 tho i dont know if u forgot about this part or is it really part of the plot
Darkness_Enjoyer:I legit hate it when people only read the first ten chapters and give a review about a story that has yet to bloom and show its good points. I also don't like the fact that people seem to think a person should always think in the same line that never changes. Because in the beginning, his two souls got merged, MC didn't even have the time to think and feel the emotions that might trigger as time goes because of some words, and I wanted to show that a person's thoughts wouldn't be stable the moment they transmigrated because IT DOESN'T MAKE SENSE. Legit, I think most people don't want a human but a robot as MC nowadays. Anyway, I won't delete this review and even pin it. For those who want an MC whose thoughts never change, please don't read my book and look for others.
Since you decided to pin me here, I'm gonna list all the Inconsistencies I encounter on this novel đđđ In this paragraph you said to kill your own emotions. "Then, how does one become a unique existence? How can you become different than any other person you will encounter? How can you prove you are better and that you are a person who stands on the ground above? The answer is pretty simple. It is to kill your own emotions that always chain you to achieve greater lengths." Then next you said this đđđ "In other words, a person who gets excited in front of the mountain would need to cross. That is the kind of person who would become great in the future, at least for me." How can you imply that to get stronger you need to kill emotion, yet the next paragraph you need to be 'excited' to become strong đđđ
Darkness_Enjoyer:I legit hate it when people only read the first ten chapters and give a review about a story that has yet to bloom and show its good points. I also don't like the fact that people seem to think a person should always think in the same line that never changes. Because in the beginning, his two souls got merged, MC didn't even have the time to think and feel the emotions that might trigger as time goes because of some words, and I wanted to show that a person's thoughts wouldn't be stable the moment they transmigrated because IT DOESN'T MAKE SENSE. Legit, I think most people don't want a human but a robot as MC nowadays. Anyway, I won't delete this review and even pin it. For those who want an MC whose thoughts never change, please don't read my book and look for others.
That is exactly how you think when you watch a video and get excited without not seeing or living the situation at all. The MC in my novel is not someone who is always true; he makes mistakes just like he did in this part. Just because the MC said something or thought something doesn't mean it will be like that. We are all humans, and in the end, even you or I can become inconsistent. That is what makes the main character human, not some sort of robot whose thoughts always match another and never clash with himself.
Ornoth:Since you decided to pin me here, I'm gonna list all the Inconsistencies I encounter on this novel đđđ In this paragraph you said to kill your own emotions. "Then, how does one become a unique existence? How can you become different than any other person you will encounter? How can you prove you are better and that you are a person who stands on the ground above? The answer is pretty simple. It is to kill your own emotions that always chain you to achieve greater lengths." Then next you said this đđđ "In other words, a person who gets excited in front of the mountain would need to cross. That is the kind of person who would become great in the future, at least for me." How can you imply that to get stronger you need to kill emotion, yet the next paragraph you need to be 'excited' to become strong đđđ
For this, I will review the chapters of the first volume and try to fix those details. At that time, I was just excitedly writing chapters that I didn't even pay much attention to them.
SnackFu:u are only pointing out the major inconsistency not the minor ones like getting bloodthorn herb from kitchen and then saying that blood thorn herbs are very rare with 9 star beast guarding it? also when he confronts noah to talk to him how did he suddenly get commoner clothes? also the charm it was 9.9 but suddenly became 5.5 tho i dont know if u forgot about this part or is it really part of the plot
Albiet Albiet Albiet Albiet Albiet Albiet Albiet Albiet Albiet Albiet Albiet Albiet Albiet Albiet Albiet Albiet Albiet Albiet Albiet Albiet Albiet Albiet Albiet Albiet Since the day you discovered the word 'Albiet', you overused it as if your life depended on it.
Darkness_Enjoyer:For this, I will review the chapters of the first volume and try to fix those details. At that time, I was just excitedly writing chapters that I didn't even pay much attention to them.
Yeah right, because the MC advocating to kill his emotions will DEFINITELY not turn him into a Doll đđđ
Darkness_Enjoyer:That is exactly how you think when you watch a video and get excited without not seeing or living the situation at all. The MC in my novel is not someone who is always true; he makes mistakes just like he did in this part. Just because the MC said something or thought something doesn't mean it will be like that. We are all humans, and in the end, even you or I can become inconsistent. That is what makes the main character human, not some sort of robot whose thoughts always match another and never clash with himself.
There is no need to refute this shortcoming; neither am I trying to cover it. This was one of the things I needed to change and fix, which I will do after my school semester ends.
Ornoth:Albiet Albiet Albiet Albiet Albiet Albiet Albiet Albiet Albiet Albiet Albiet Albiet Albiet Albiet Albiet Albiet Albiet Albiet Albiet Albiet Albiet Albiet Albiet Albiet Since the day you discovered the word 'Albiet', you overused it as if your life depended on it.
As I previously mentioned, he is not a mere doll. He is capable of experiencing anger, possessing a conscience, and forming attachments. It's important to note that just because he may have said something in the heat of the moment, it doesn't necessarily reflect his true nature - something that should already be evident. While I don't claim that my novel is flawless, I do strive to correct any errors that are brought to my attention. However, I do differ in opinion from others who believe he is inconsistent - that's the crux of the matter..
Ornoth:Yeah right, because the MC advocating to kill his emotions will DEFINITELY not turn him into a Doll đđđ
Frankly I donât mind the small inconsistencies. Itâs the plot holes that get to me. I get what ur getting at tho. Hated when mcs would say things like he would do this, go there or make all kinds of promises only for it to be forgotten. I swear some authors donât keep track of what they write. Like if they wrote something like âI should go there after this,â they should write it down somewhere. And yes character development is a thing so they wonât remain the same and Im cool with that when itâs in a good direction. Shadow slave is a good example of that. loved how he was the first 500 chapter not so much after.
Josh_Mendoz:Frankly I donât mind the small inconsistencies. Itâs the plot holes that get to me. I get what ur getting at tho. Hated when mcs would say things like he would do this, go there or make all kinds of promises only for it to be forgotten. I swear some authors donât keep track of what they write. Like if they wrote something like âI should go there after this,â they should write it down somewhere. And yes character development is a thing so they wonât remain the same and Im cool with that when itâs in a good direction. Shadow slave is a good example of that. loved how he was the first 500 chapter not so much after.
No people are angels; even Callius himself is not a good person. Though, of course, I don't want an MC that just kills random people, so I need to give reasons for the main cast to show themselves as enemies.
ELDER_LICH01:hey author why i am thinking ur r trying to paint all the original mc character as bad people.
bro the first villainnes story was she controlled or blackmailed everyone in orginal story and for mc pov she was right so what is wrong about mc step mother to do the same thing or the mc fiancee
Darkness_Enjoyer:No people are angels; even Callius himself is not a good person. Though, of course, I don't want an MC that just kills random people, so I need to give reasons for the main cast to show themselves as enemies.
As long as you strive to improve, and it sounds like you are, it is worth at least looking into. Nobody starts with a Lord of the Mysteries! Keep improving and I am sure it will be memorable.
Darkness_Enjoyer:Shadow Slave is the best that is ongoing on this platform, so no wonder.
Darkness_Enjoyer:I legit hate it when people only read the first ten chapters and give a review about a story that has yet to bloom and show its good points. I also don't like the fact that people seem to think a person should always think in the same line that never changes. Because in the beginning, his two souls got merged, MC didn't even have the time to think and feel the emotions that might trigger as time goes because of some words, and I wanted to show that a person's thoughts wouldn't be stable the moment they transmigrated because IT DOESN'T MAKE SENSE. Legit, I think most people don't want a human but a robot as MC nowadays. Anyway, I won't delete this review and even pin it. For those who want an MC whose thoughts never change, please don't read my book and look for others.
Actually read it when there was only about 300 chapters and used it as an example not cause itâs the most popular but cause of his character development. Can list others but this one in my opinion is one of the more obvious ones. Stopped reading when he reavled everything gonna wait until there is 1000+ chapters
Darkness_Enjoyer:Shadow Slave is the best that is ongoing on this platform, so no wonder.