Review Detail of isolated_nerd1606 in 40 Yards

You have a very nice core for the story , author . Just hold on to it . It has a very nice development . Maybe the only thing holding the story back is over complication of character and repeated use of names . At the same time , So many new names have been introduced that the main character and important supporting characters are being overshadowed . Else , its all good and will be watching over the progression of story.