Review Detail of David_Orchard in Devil Slave (Satan system)

The story is good, but I feel like the MC is a little wishy washy when it comes to his humanity. He is written as a psychopath and this brilliant assassin, but at times he is illogically stupid. There's also the bit about him finding humanity, losing it, and finding it again at what I thought were unnecessary times. Personally, it just kind of made the MC feel artificial, not totally bad but not great either. I liked how the world building played out. I thought that it was well done with different factions and incorporating multiple facets from an apocalyptic world. I really only have two major critiques. Firstly, there are large parts where I feel there is a step forward in plot, five steps back with long info dumps or a random background story, and then a mad rush of 10 steps forward with plot. I'm sure there's a grand design, but there were whole chapters at times that I just skipped. There were definitely some plot twists that I never saw coming though coupled with some pretty entertaining dialogues as well. My second critique is mostly grammar. By no means is it bad, but there are times when the completely wrong word is used or an occasional character name switch. Again, not the worst, it would just sometimes break my flow. The story as a whole is enjoyable. Thank you for your hard work. I was honestly surprised on how fast you could push out content.