Review Detail of Alan_Kruzado in Re:life with Karmic Gacha (Modern Family)

First of all I have to congratulate you, this is an extremely compelling story, almost addictive. Not many can achieve that. It has quickly become one of my favorite fanfics. Now, some recommendations for your story: 1. Use the first person POV only with your MC, this will allow your readers to better identify with the character. Some may be a bit thrown off when they read Haley or Abby as Ed. Your 3rd person POVs are great, even more so considering you're doing it with a sitcom. I recommend you use them when you want to go deep into a single character. 2. Use a paragraph to place the dialogues of a single character. Using the dialogues of 2 or, God forbid, 3 characters and placing them in a single paragraph can be confusing and make you lose interest in the story. Still, your premise is so good and interesting that even that didn't put me off. That's how good you are. And that's all I can tell you as a new reader who got hooked on your story and even joined webnovel because of it. It really is an incredible story, congratulations. ps: commentary scenes are a delight, never stop using them.