Review Detail of Garland in Genshin Impact: Soul System
Review detail
It has a good start and premise though i would have recommend that you actually show us the main character meeting and interacting with the genshin cast as simply telling us doesn't really sell the idea of them being friends. How is he friends with them? How do they interact? What kind of relationship to they have? These are the things that should be shown naturally and not just "oh they are friends". After that, then you can have some timeskip.
Genshin Impact: Soul System
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Then you should have made your character or the system more rogue-like, being in the shadows and interacting less. With the way how the system works, you pretty mich placed your character in situations where they must interact with other people. I'm just giving you advice, you don't need to follow it since it is your story. I'm just saying that to me, it felt really quick for him to be that close to the other characters without having a good setup or interaction.
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