Review Detail of Charlzie in New Life; Fun Life
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Good book but the MC is useless, he’s dumb (maybe even autistic) , cowardly, he’s a beta when it comes to females and gets dragged around by the plot. To be honest this story wlulf be way more interesting without Liam, he brings nothing to it and instead ruins it with chapters dedicated to him just to never change. I enjoyed most other characters, they’re mostly 3 Dimensional and entertaining but I can’t bring myself to read another chapter of Liam being a r3tard, I lose braincells every chapter.
New Life; Fun Life
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I do appreciate your criticism, it can help me improve. But there are still somethings I want to make clear. firstly, like I've emphasized many times, this is my first novel and my grammar isn't perfect, same with plot, character development, and other essential components, so I hope you understand. secondly, Liam is a teenager who doesn't have much experience with how the world works. Transmigrating into a fantasy world, he will need time to develop. If you do have any ideas on how I should improve myself... please comment. Thanks
I didn’t encounter any problems except Liam, haven’t seen grammar errors and If I did my brain probably auto corrected them. I enjoyed the story and I’m planning on reading it again once it gets a lot more chapters, I just want Liam to develop that’s my only complaint. Now, the way he does is completely up to you.
Believer_X:I do appreciate your criticism, it can help me improve. But there are still somethings I want to make clear. firstly, like I've emphasized many times, this is my first novel and my grammar isn't perfect, same with plot, character development, and other essential components, so I hope you understand. secondly, Liam is a teenager who doesn't have much experience with how the world works. Transmigrating into a fantasy world, he will need time to develop. If you do have any ideas on how I should improve myself... please comment. Thanks
Charlzie:I didn’t encounter any problems except Liam, haven’t seen grammar errors and If I did my brain probably auto corrected them. I enjoyed the story and I’m planning on reading it again once it gets a lot more chapters, I just want Liam to develop that’s my only complaint. Now, the way he does is completely up to you.